Sunday, February 12, 2012

Rainbow like daydreams






(Photo by Little Heart Archu)

Rainbow like daydreams
can see them but, can't touch them
Mesmerizing illusions

Rainbow like daydreams

Mesmerizing illusions
can see them but, can't touch them
rainbow like daydreams

P.s: I'm new to this haiku, naisaiku style of poetry. You are free to correct my mistakes if there are any or give any suggestions if you like to. It will help me do better.






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Susie Clevenger said...

Beautiful image and words...you handled the form well

kalyan said...

wow wow the music is so mesmerizing ... a bommanu choosthu music vintuntee ahaaaaa entha madhurangaa vundho.... adbutham ga vundhi..

Asni said...

Hmm ... beautiful! Love the music too.

Simran said...

Colourful illusion! :)
Love the idea of daydream.. :))

Mama Zen said...

I think that you did a great job!

Amber said...

Yea, you did a wonderful job! Love the picture! :) <3

becca givens said...

The image you used is perfect with the feel of your Naisaiku ... I think you did a great job for your debut in this form. Thank you for sharing!

~*Princesa Fiona*~ said...

Artistic image accompanied by beautiful haiku! I'm not familiar with the Naisaiku part of. Does it require different syllable counts, other than 5-7-5? {|:-)

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Phew, this is a busy blog! Cool NaiSaiKu too! Thanks for playing along.
Andy Sewina

⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺ said...

Thanks for the read Susie, Kalyan, Asni, Simi, Mama Zen, Amber, Becca,Fiona, SweetTalkingGuy :)

⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺ said...

@Fiona.....Naisaku is a format in which ....swapping of first and third lines of the haiku....conveys the same meaning!...That is how I understood the meaning

Someone is Special said...

Wow wow wow... a colourful image! Beautiful Naisaiku! Damn good..!

⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺ said...

Thanks for the read Someone is Special :)

Luis Rivas Takeda said...

This is lovely, you certainly conveyed beauty and a dream like feel to this poem :)
I didn't know this type of poem, will give it a go.

 

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