Wednesday, July 18, 2012

Thoughts of suicide







If I die
each second in life,
Life is death...

If death seems
heavenly than life,
Death is life...

If all life is meant
for despair and grief, In suicide
I find calm relief....

P.s. Neither my sketch nor my words above encourage suicide. My intention is to portray the state of mind or feelings of a person who wants to commit suicide.


Written for Haiku Heights



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pemi !! :) said...

heey .... hi valli... the things u post..
ur page.. everything is different.. do continue ur work !! :) all the pics are good... i love dis page.. :) <3

Panchali said...

A moving piece, Valli. Touches a raw nerve!! Well penned...

Ramesh Sood said...

No Valli...that's why we need to find our inner glow..and not bother about the external sources of light.. if we do that, life would always be beautiful..and in any case I have always believed even if life is not beautiful..still life is very beatiful....no I pray that one should never feel that weak..so as to take one's own life.. each day is a new sunrise..

Well I am here:

http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2012/07/he-plays-flute.html

ArtMuseDog and Carol said...

very powerful contemplative haiku ~ glad you are well ~~ thanks, ^_^ (A Creative Harbor)

Grace said...

I like the capture of suicide thoughts ~

However I thought it would have been more effective if you don't use life and death as it is too general for haiku writing. I suggest using a symbol to connote it. If I may:

bleeding wrists,
wilting white flower,
take my heart !

I hope you don't mind ~

⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺ said...

Pemi...
Thank you so much...Hope you will continue visiting my page :)

Panchali...
Thank you so much for the read

Rameshji...
I too pray for those hearts who want to commit suicide....Let God give them strength

Carol...
Thanks for the read :)

Grace..
That's amazing what you wrote!...I'll try to write haiku more effectively...Thanks for the suggestion :)...

Green Speck said...

You handled a tough subject quite well :-)

Tarang Sinha said...

Well Portrayed! :)

Kristjaan Panneman said...

This is ... I don't know how to say this ... a complete different angle in using the theme meaning. I think when someone's committing suicide it's very sad, but for the one who commits it it will be a relief. Thank you for sharing your haiku in this way.

Namaste

Vållῐ ★☆ said...

@Speck
Thanks for the read :)

@Tarang
Thank you :)

@Kristjaan
Very true, Thanks for the read :)

kaykuala said...

It frightened me at first, whew! Suicide is a bad word! Lucky thing you qualified the intentions! Nicely done, Valli!

Hank

Tweety said...

It is a WOW...truly....

I may never encourage the thought of suicide but something somewhere must lead to it...if life is actually so despairing...maybe an end is all we look for...Brilliant...

Ranita Sinha said...

Marvelously penned..liked it very much..actually it would hv been the mind set of those who commit it..

Leo said...

Never easy to justify suicide..

Perhaps, it's what they feel, to find the relief they seek.. but I agree with RS ji in one way.. we have to find the strength to stay alive..

Vållῐ ★☆ said...

Hank,Tweety,Ranitha,Leo
Thanks for your comments and suggestions :)

Locomente said...

U nailed it...
Death is life..
The base for suicidal thoughts!!!

 

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